Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Although
it is commonly believed that it is better to admit a situation which
is not satisfying Correct pronoun usage
that
such
as,
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an
unpleasant work or low finance, others consider that it is always best to develop Correct article usage
apply
such
circumstances. In my opinion, I consider that no matter what stage of life
a person is standing, people
always ought to improve themselves.
On the one hand, it is thought by some that individuals should accept any unpleasant situation they are in to
, or Change preposition
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in other words
, they leave themselves to the
destiny; Change the word
their
hence
, they do not work hard or try to change the situation they are not comfortable with since they see the obstacles and feel they are out of control. As a consequence, they end up doing the job they are not interested in which leads them to low performane
in the workforce and Correct your spelling
performance
then
they will probably face shortage
of income too. Add an article
a shortage
Nevertheless
, destiny is a small part of each person's life
and each individuals
are Change to a singular noun
individual
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in control
in-control
of their journey Correct your spelling
in control
of
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in
life
.
On the other hand
, it is considered by others that, people
should always seek to develop their existance
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existence
Furthermore
, to improve family welfare and reduce issues to promote comfort. To elaborate, when someone do
the job they want and they Change the verb form
does
passionate
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are passionate
this
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provides
gurantee
and reduces stress. Correct your spelling
guarantee
For instance
, failure in the workforce or to have
financial issues could lead to depression and anxiety. Change the verb form
having
Consequently
, to live a pleasant family improvement is essential for the people
as well as society. Thus
, it is evident promotion is necessary for all sole.
In conclusion, while people
may vary in their opinions, I think they are the captain of their ship; therefore
, they have to always search for improvement and high-quality life
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