Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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it is commonly believed that it is better to admit a situation
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is not satisfying
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unpleasant work or low finance, others consider that it is always best to develop
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circumstances. In my opinion, I consider that no matter what stage of
life
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a person is standing,
people
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always ought to improve themselves. On the one hand, it is thought by some that individuals should accept any unpleasant situation they are in
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, they leave themselves to
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destiny;
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, they do not work hard or try to change the situation they are not comfortable with since they see the obstacles and feel they are out of control. As a consequence, they end up doing the job they are not interested in which leads them to low
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performance
in the workforce and
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they will probably face
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of income too.
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, destiny is a small part of each person's
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and each
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in control
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of their journey
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life
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.
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, it is considered by others that,
people
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should always seek to develop their
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existence
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, to improve family welfare and reduce issues to promote comfort. To elaborate, when someone
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the job they want and they
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about with a good salary
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peovides
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provides
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guarantee
and reduces stress.
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, failure in the workforce or
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financial issues could lead to depression and anxiety.
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, to live a pleasant family improvement is essential for the
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as well as society.
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, it is evident promotion is necessary for all sole. In conclusion, while
people
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may vary in their opinions, I think they are the captain of their ship;
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, they have to always search for improvement and high-quality
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