The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The first graph displays the percentages of
households
that owned electrical appliances in one country from 1920 to 2019,
while
the
second
graph illustrates how much time
households
in that country spent doing housework during the same period.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the ownership of all three
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electrical
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appliances in
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household
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increased during
this
period, with that
of
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refrigerators having the greatest growth. At the same time, the amount
of
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spent on housework decreased. Looking at the graphs more closely, one can see that the proportion of
households
with
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refrigerator
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was nearly 0% in 1920, but after that time the figure increased rapidly and eventually reached 100% in 1980.
Along
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, the ownership of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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also
increased gradually and
finally
reached 100% in 2000.
In contrast
, the proportion of owning washing machines in
households
was the highest among three electrical devices in 1920, but in 2019, it was the lowest percentage.
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Furthermore
, the number of hours doing housework per week fell significantly from 50 to 15 hours between 1920 and 1980. After that, it slightly fell to around 10 hours in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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