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People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that staying in one
job
 will give a more satisfying working experience rather than changing
jobs
 often. I agree with
this
 because changing
jobs
 often will give you less
time
 and difficult to know your colleagues. In general, staying in one
job
 will give you more
time
 to know the people around you and it'll be easier to be close with the boss.
On the other hand
, changing
jobs
 frequently will make it harder to be friendly with other co-workers. When we start working, the feeling of discomfort will sometimes occur, and it may be because of the bad relations with you and your co-workers, low income, or maybe the amount of work you're asked to do. The option of finding a new and better
job
 becomes more apparent and appealing to take. Both career options have their ups and downs, but when it comes to the people around you, it is much better to know others for a long period of
time
. If you change
jobs
 frequently, you can't get close to others that quickly.
Therefore
, it will give you a less exciting and happy working experience. The choice always depends on the work environment, you may choose the
job
 because of the facilities it provides, the high-income salary, or just the new experience you want to feel.
However
, when you work hard enough and long enough, it is very likely that your salary will increase over
time
, it may even be more beneficial in some cases. To summarize, I agree to some extent that working in one
job
 for longer periods of
time
 is better than changing
jobs
 ever so often.
Submitted by miarosmia8 on

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