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Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today is an era of technology. There are many people who take advantage of technology. Without technology, it is difficult to survive for everyone and
hence
, everyone uses the internet, and mobiles so easily. Now, some people think that youngsters should not be allowed to have electronic
devices
. I will discuss points and give my view about
this
.
Firstly
, children go to
school
 and see their friends
use
 their phones. When students
use
devices
 in their classroom,
then
 they distract from studying and they only focus to
use
devices
 and keep watching movies, playing games etc.
For example
, on daily basis news, we hear about fights in schools.
Moreover
, in
this
 way, they do not follow the rules and regulations of the institution and
as a result
, they have to face teachers' anger.
Furthermore
, if a child uses the phone at the academy,
then
 it may put a bad impact on other tenants.
Secondly
, social media is not good for children at
school
 age because
that is
 the age to learn something and grow with that. Institutions can dismiss them in order to
use
 the
devices
 at
school
 and it can be a disadvantage to
use
 the
devices
 at a young.
For example
, there are
amny
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many
any
 youngers who do not follow the instructions given by the academy and
then
 they face consequences.
Hence
, it is not useful to
use
 the phone at
school
 and the children do that,
then
 they have to face many problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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