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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while other say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school.Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #universities #offer #places #students #marks #ages #school
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In
this
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 knowledge-based society, where the acquisition of knowledge is the key to better career prospects and having access to
university
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 education is a life-changing opportunity for many
students
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.
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, some people claim universities should only accept young pupils with the highest grades, whereas others emphasise every student regardless of age and academic ability should be given equal educational opportunities. I will discuss both views and state my opinion in the following essay.
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, those who support the idea of high school
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 with higher grades are more deserved to attend
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 point of their superior to their academic skills when compared to their peers.
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,
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 scholars are more likely to handle the immense workload and pressure at
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.
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, offering
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 places only a limited number of
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 would result in high-quality undergraduates.
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, many well-known universities in Vietnam
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 as National Economic
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 or Foreign Trade
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 recruit only the highest scorers in the national
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 entrance exam in order to make sure that all of the resources are available for
students
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 who have a higher chance of success.
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, supporters of the
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 opinion believe it is unfair to older
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 or those who do not
well
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 at school. A student's age or performance at school does not always reflect their potential to succeed at
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.
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, it is unethical to deny access to tertiary education to some
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, especially in a world where formal qualifications are of great importance in gaining employment.
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, there is more to college admissions than just academic performance.
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, some universities
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 as Yale or Havard , not only accept academically gifted
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 but
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 those who are particularly gifted in sport or art.
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 helps to maintain a diverse community, where each student is valued and rewarded for what they are good at
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 of just academic excellence. In conclusion,
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 only accepting
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 with high marks is advantageous in some ways, I believe providing higher education for all
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 is more just and beneficial in the long term.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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