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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
It is predicted that the
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printed
books
 and newspapers will be replaced by cutting-edge devices
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 since they will be more accessible without
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.To be honest, I am convinced that it is a
usless
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 utilizing
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printed
books
.
Firstly
,the authors and the reporters suffer from
this
 topic so that if the
volums
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volumes
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 and the magazines are going to be free, their incomes would be removed and day by day the authors will be leave writing.
As a result
 not only will both the useful
books
 and magazines
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 but
aslo
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also
 the meaningless ones are more popular.
This
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another dire consequences
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such
 as
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 effects on society, I mean that countries require the folks who are educated and
literated
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literate
literature
.When the range of volumes transmit to trivial
books
, over time
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 lack of education will
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.It is better to protect traditional methods. Apart from what is concerned about before, I agree that it can have some positive footprints.Due to some citizens are not
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 it will be
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 them accustomed to reading
books
.Since electronic
books
 are easier and cheaper.
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 by creating
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in
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 social media with influencers,
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 the
books
 are more attractive. To wrap up what was mentioned above,I believe that the satisfaction of authors is more important in humans life.
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, governments must
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the
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free electronic
books
 to neither the number of writers be reduced nor the
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 of readers be diminished.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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