In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so suggest solutions?

In the age of technology,
children
adopt sedentary lifestyles and unhealthy
food
habits which leads to obesity at an early age.
However
, these issues can be solved with prominent changes in their lifestyle with homemade cook
food
and the provision of outdoor activities in the curriculum.
This
essay will discuss the reasons and will put forth some measures to tackle the same.
To begin
with,
children
are fond of fast
food
items like pizza, cold drinks, and pasta which are high in calories and make a person lazy. According to a recent survey conducted in the United States, 70% of youngsters are more prone to obesity due to unhealthy
food
habits. Another reason behind
this
trend is the lack of physical activities like badminton; football; swimming; and so on in the curriculum. No attention to physical needs is given by the Authority and
children
become lethargic. To illustrate
this
, Kids are more participating in videos games or sitting games rather than playing any outdoor games.
Nevertheless
, these issues can be resolved by inculcating good habits into
children
by making homemade
food
interesting and giving a fusion touch to it so that no teenager ignores that.
For example
, Nestle brand makes so many items like Choco's, healthy chocolates, and healthy drinks so that kids adopt a healthy lifestyle.
In addition
,
the
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introduction of extra-curricular activities in the curriculum, adolescents give more attention and give their best to score good marks in it. A recent paper found that 80% of students engage in at least two physical
exercise
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in Japan.
Although
,
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obesity is a major problem not only among young ones but
also
among the old generation in several nations, the provision of physical exercise in the school course and shifting foodstuff towards homemade
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the nation healthy and disease-free.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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