In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so suggest solutions?

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In the age of technology,

children

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adopt sedentary lifestyles and unhealthy

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habits which leads to obesity at an early age.

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, these issues can be solved with prominent changes in their lifestyle with homemade cook

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and the provision of outdoor activities in the curriculum.

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essay will discuss the reasons and will put forth some measures to tackle the same.

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with,

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are fond of fast

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items like pizza, cold drinks, and pasta which are high in calories and make a person lazy. According to a recent survey conducted in the United States, 70% of youngsters are more prone to obesity due to unhealthy

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habits. Another reason behind

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trend is the lack of physical activities like badminton; football; swimming; and so on in the curriculum. No attention to physical needs is given by the Authority and

children

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become lethargic. To illustrate

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, Kids are more participating in videos games or sitting games rather than playing any outdoor games.

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, these issues can be resolved by inculcating good habits into

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by making homemade

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interesting and giving a fusion touch to it so that no teenager ignores that.

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, Nestle brand makes so many items like Choco's, healthy chocolates, and healthy drinks so that kids adopt a healthy lifestyle.

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introduction of extra-curricular activities in the curriculum, adolescents give more attention and give their best to score good marks in it. A recent paper found that 80% of students engage in at least two physical

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in Japan.

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obesity is a major problem not only among young ones but

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among the old generation in several nations, the provision of physical exercise in the school course and shifting foodstuff towards homemade

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the nation healthy and disease-free.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

299 words

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In many countries, children are getting fatter and less fit day by day. Why is it so suggest solutions?

Include an introduction and conclusion

One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and, you forgot to tell your friend that you couldnt attend.

Some people think that national news is very important and we should be up to date with national news. However, some says international news is more important as we should stay up to date with that. Discuss both and give your opinion

Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

'People who do not use social media networks* will always fall behind in career development opportunities.' To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction?

Some people say that what individuals do to protect cannot make difference, others say that individuals can protect environment. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.