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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that during the formative years,
parents
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 should punish their daughters and sons to bring up them. In
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 essay, I strongly disagree with the approach because
minors
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 are able to learn rapidly at an early age with proper teaching methods, and physical discipline might have a negative impact on a child's growth. Mothers and fathers can teach their infants patiently without violence. If
children
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 are repetitively reminded about a scenario or a lesson together with sufficient explanations, they are able to remember quickly as their cognitive processes are growing during
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 period.
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, these
minors
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 can apply
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 knowledge to their life
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parents
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 will not be stressed out to use physical punishment in teaching them.
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, it is common for authoritarians
parents
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 to punish their
children
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 in Vietnam, but ever since the authority encouraged families to apply modern teaching methods from western countries, more
parents
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 have abandoned punishment in child-rearing. Physical discipline might potentially be dangerous for the
minors
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' health. During the formative years, infants need proper nutrition and a healthy living environment for their growth.
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 punishments can create injuries that slow down
children
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's developing processes or can be fatal in some cases.
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, in Vietnam, because there are many casualties that happened to
children
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 by caretakers' disciplining, the government has applied the child protection law to protect
minors
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 from
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. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with punishing
minors
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 because
children
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 can be educated about good behaviour with the effort of
parents
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 and hitting
children
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 for discipline might have a detrimental impact on their health.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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