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Augmented Reality technology is beneficial. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#reality #technology
The
technologies
 that create virtual
reality
 are important. I agree that
such
technologies
 open up new possibilities and create a close relationship between man and computer.
Firstly
, augmented
technologies
 are very useful and do not allow people to be limited to simple gadgets. We can use them any way we want because these days it is already implemented on our mobile devices. We can chat with our friends,
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 ones and still be in another country. These types of
technologies
 open up great opportunities in any field. An example of
this
, augmented
reality
 has been used for many years in medicine, in the advertising industry, in military technology, in games, for monitoring objects and
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mobile devices. The
second
 reason why I agree with
this
 phrase is that augmented
technologies
 create a close connection between people and computers
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 while making it possible to keep up with the constant progress in the world. Augmented
reality
 is one of the many
technologies
 for human-computer interaction. Its specificity lies in the fact that it programmatically visually combines two
initially
 independent spaces: the world of real objects around us and the virtual world recreated on a computer.
For example
, augmented
reality
 technology is basically software.
That is
, these are special mathematical algorithms that connect the camera, tags and computer into a single interactive system. In the end, I want to say that augmented
technologies
 give us the opportunity to become more progressive and based on the
first
 reason, I can say that it makes life easier while creating a connection between man and modern
technologies
, keeping up with the time cycle and the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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