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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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A concerning technology effective has grown in importance over the past years. It is undeniable that electrical tools might consume other limited resources
such
 as
space
 and budget,
however
, I strongly believe that high technology will benefit
people
 as much as books.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages that outweigh the disadvantages of having hi-tech media as well as give examples of its benefit.
First
 of all, the main purpose of libraries is to facilitate the source of
knowledge
, according to Oxbridge Dictionary.
This
 means any tools that are able to deliver targeted
information
 should be taken into account.
Although
having
Unnecessary verb
apply
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hardware
such
 as computers, videos, and DVDs take some
space
, they collect
knowledge
 and
information
 uncountably, while, a book contains only one content or topic.
This
 shows that a computer requires lesser
space
 than a textbook. Another benefit of e-media
is simplify
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is simplified
is simplifying
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information
 searching. In the past,
people
 have to find data on their own since there were no supporting tools. Nowadays, the data can be found easily with a finger click, thanks to the internet.
Knowledge
 and
information
 are connected which allow
people
, especially researchers and students, to conduct research and finish their project. Searching on the internet is far faster than opening every single textbook. From my personal experience, e-media
such
 as videos and DVDs are more attractive and gain my attention to study and learn than reading a text. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of using hi-tech media will empower and optimise the use of
knowledge
 in the library and could be a favourite source for some
people
. Choosing the right media depends on content
instead
 of concern about
space
 consumption.
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