the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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below are both illustrating the road access to the same
city
hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
It is clear that
the road access to the
city
hospital was much improved and developed. The main features of the maps are as follows: - In 2010 the
city
hospital has a bigger parking lot for the public
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the East side of the main building. In 2007 the public and the staff were having the same parking place near the entrance which was smaller. -The bus station was moved near the principal entrance
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the
city
hospital making it easier for the patients and their relatives to get to the hospital -The car circulation on the road was greatly improved by creating a few roundabout intersections near the main entrance of the hospital and where the bus stop was in 2007. -By making all
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the access of the public was greatly enhanced.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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