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Band 7

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary era,
people
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 have different basic needs. One of the essential ones is clean drinking
water
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. It is said that the government should provide
this
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 supply to them freely. I disagree with
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 statement to a large extent, and I am going to elaborate on
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 in the following paragraphs.
People
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 have used
water
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 for several reasons recently,
such
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 as agriculture, washing, drinking, and cooking. If authorities provide
this
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 opportunity to use clean
water
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 without any payment,
people
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 will waste
this
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 natural resource during their routines. Farmers and other
people
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 might use clean drinking
water
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 for agriculture, or washing their cars or floors,
instead
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 of alternative ways.
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, a
lot
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 of clean
water
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 will be wasted without correct management.
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,
this
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 resource might decrease for the next generation.
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, the government should spend much more money on
this
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 project, which cannot be sustained in the long run, and they have to pay a
lot
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 again.
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, they cannot invest in other projects in their country.
On the other hand
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, many species depend on
water
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 for survival. By consuming a
lot
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 of
water
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, they will be at risk of extinction. Humans can affect their environment a
lot
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 through their activities, like wasting
water
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.
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, as other creatures decline, our own lives will ultimately be threatened. In some countries, there has been some evidence to distribute
water
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 without any charge, but they indicated that
people
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 consumed more
water
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 in comparison with other countries. So, they will use it more consciously
due to
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 the bill they have to pay for
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, In conclusion,
although
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 clean
water
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 is a right of every human, we should not forget our next generations and other species in the world. I recommend that all governments subsidise the cost of clean
water
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 and introduce educational reforms to raise
people
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’s awareness about
water
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 management.

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Planning
Make your position clear in the opening and keep it in each part. Each paragraph should have one main idea with two small details.
Language
Use short, plain sentences. Some lines are long and hard to follow.
Content
Give one or two real examples or facts to back each point, not only ideas.
Coherence
Connect ideas with simple link words and start body with a topic sentence.
Strength
The writer has a clear view on the issue.
Idea
Good attempt to discuss both waste and cost as limits.
Structure
Conclusion offers a practical solution.
Technique
Work shows effort to use linking words and contrasts.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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