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The illustrations describe the potential changes taking place in the heart of Islip. Overall, what stands out from the maps is that the
principle
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 change to
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 town may be the construction of a ring road around the central area. Interestingly, various amenities will be built inside the aforementioned road. Looking at the maps in more detail, the main road which runs through the
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 from west to east is proposed to be substituted by the area for pedestrians only in the not-too-distant future.
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, traffic may be
also
 planned to turn into a dual carriageway which will play an indispensable part in forming a beltway around the town centre. When it comes to the facilities in
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 town, numerous shops which are currently near the countryside might be intended to be demolished to make room for
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 station, shopping centre, car park and new housing, respectively in the future. While the shops and housing area which are in the Southern part of these maps seem to remain unchanged in the feasible plan, a new park is believed to be constructed in the vacant position in
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