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Band 5.5

your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs in order to save money write a letter to the city council

#council #sport #leisure #center #money #city
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Good day, My name is Clarissa Smith and I live on Sesame Street in the city of Longisland.
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, for the
last
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 5 years, my home was in the area of
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 local council.
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 was a great place to live for me and my family. I have to say, that the sport and leisure
centre
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 was the best place for us to relax.
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, I have made a lot of friends there and new acquaintances. Social relationships are very important for the well-being of our community and
this
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centre
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 is helping us to socialize and keep our levels of happiness up.
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, exercise is of great importance for our community health. As far as I know, a lot of my neighbours are doing sports at the local
center
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. In my opinion, closing down our
center
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 of relaxation and exercise will bring a lot of sadness
in
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 our town.
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, I have to say that closing the
sport
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 and leisure
centre
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 in our neighbourhood, will not save you money.
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 will result in negative outcomes in people's lives which will affect their productivity levels and contentment.
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, I kindly request for reconsider your decision of closing the
centre
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 of sport and leisure. Sincerely Yours, Mahatma Gunderson
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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