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Smacking children is good to discipline a child. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past few years, people thinking have changed to a great extent.
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, there has been an ongoing debate among people about whether beating
children
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 makes them disciplined or not. I completely disagree with the statement because
instead
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 of becoming docile, they tend to become stubborn.
This
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 essay will state some points regarding the issue.
Parents
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 play a pivotal role in the upbringing of their offspring. Though some people think smacking
children
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 , will make them disciplined but the reality turns out to be exactly the opposite ,
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instead
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children
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 become more agitated and start misbehaving with their
parents
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.
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, they stop sharing their problems and concerns with them, which in turn pull them away from their
parents
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.
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, in many ,movies it can be seen that
children
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 who get physically assaulted at a small age by their
parents
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, usually do not like to stay with them and it is hard for them to find solace in the world.
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,
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 of smacking them, it would be better if
parents
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 make them understand politely with examples.
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,
children
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 nowadays learn more from the experiences of others rather than forcing them physically.
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, the law in western countries clearly states that smacking
children
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 is against the law and a person will be charged if found to be guilty.
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,
parents
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 patiently handle all sorts of problems and
children
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 tend to listen to their family members. To sum up, it is important to make
children
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 disciplined but not by beating them and forcing them to understand something. It would be great if
parents
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 keep some patience with
children
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 and try to understand their viewpoint. If they will do so,
children
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 will be inclined to share their personal thoughts with their
parents
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.
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