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A lot of young people take a gap year before they start university. Do you think this is a good or a bad thing?

Nowadays lots of young people choose to take a
gap
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year
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 between their old way of living and the new one. What would you say if I told you that more of the students take a
gap
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year
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 for rest and
travel
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? Are there any benefits of taking a break or there are more disadvantages?
To begin
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 with,
the
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they
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travel
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 around the world. Having a break between high school and
the
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apply
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university is an opportunity
for
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to
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travel
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 around the world.
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,
this
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 may help you to meet different cultures and their traditions.
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, a
gap
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year
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 can help to gain new experiences.
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, if you were always with your parents, one
year
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 of
travel
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 may increase your responsibility and even can force you to start a job. It is argued that taking a
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year
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 can decrease your study habits.
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, after twelve years in ,
school
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 you have already been used to studying. If you take a
gap
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year
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,
this
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 habit may be lost. To sum up, taking a break
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 its assets, but you lose more than you think.

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