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Some people believe that printed books are no longer needed in this digital age, since all the records can be stored electronically. Others believe that printed books still play an important role. Dicuss both perspective and give your opinion?

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It is often argued digitization made electronic
books
 more preferred in
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comparison
 to printed
books
 due to their storage potential, Whilst others disagree and
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 that imprinted
books
 still play a paramount role.
This
 essay discusses both the perspective and why I believe
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books
 are
preferred
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the preferred
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 source for reading. On the one hand, some people
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e-books
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books
 are superior
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 imprinted
books
 due to
its
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 portability.
This
 is because
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e-books
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books
 can be stored at ease they do not require special storage space, unlike printed
books
 which
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an
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ample space.
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Ebooks
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books
 can be easily stored
in
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on
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 laptops, smartphones and other gadgets and can be accessed at any time or any place.
As a result
, readers can access
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multiple
books
 which
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are
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 invaluable to their studies.
For instance
, it has been found that in India, most of the
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aspirants
 for medical competitive examinations prefer
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e-books
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books
 due to their storage benefits which
helps
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help
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 them to ace the tough exams.
Thus
, students can access more information due to
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e-books
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books
.
On the other hand
, others believe that imprinted
books
 still
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crucial
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a crucial
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 role due to their
health
 benefits. To elaborate, reading
books
 in the printed format
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 not cause any sort of eye and neck
srain
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strain
train
, so it
more
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is more
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health friendly
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 to the readers, while
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e-books
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books
leads
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 to chronic
health
 disorders in the long run due to excess
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screen time. A recent study by the
univeristy
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university
 of Michigan concluded that
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the probability
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 of eye disorders and neck strains with ebooks
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 double
than
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that
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reading
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of reading
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books
 among children.
Therefore
, parents should motivate their children to minimize the usage of
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e-books
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books
 and consider conventional
books
 for reading. In conclusion,
although
 reading
books
 negates few
health
 disorders. In my opinion,
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e-books
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books
 are
better
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a better
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 source of reading.
This
 is because of their convenience, readers can carry them and read them anytime and anywhere they want.
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