It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is necessary to make sure that students with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at
school
. I agree with
this
statement. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. Ensuring
children
with a wide range of abilities mix with each other at
school
can teach
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to be
wise
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a wise
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person
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.
Children
with good abilities are not allowed to be arrogant people especially at
school
because they think have good capabilities.
For example
,
children
who have good ability in math should help their
friends
who have difficulties in
this
subject because
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no body
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is perfect, and sometimes
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condition
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can happen. They need help in other subjects from their
friends
. Not only in
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the academic
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area
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areas
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,
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they
also
need help from other
children
when they have
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a problem
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problem
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problems
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,
such
as when they get
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road
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outside the
school
. Ensuring
children
from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at
school
is important to teach  how
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respect to
other person
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another person
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.
This
is because
children
from all social and economic
background
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must give
respect
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,
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if
children
want to be accepted by
social
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the social
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environment.
For instance
,
children
in
school
will become
friends
with all other
children
without looking from
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economic or poor economic
background
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.
Consequently
,
children
will have many
friends
because they believe that
children
are
humble
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person
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people
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. If we have many
friends
, they can help when we face
problem
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problems
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in some areas when they meet us. In conclusion, mixing with
friends
at
school
is very important.
This
is because we can not live independently without other people. Sometimes we need help from other people and
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also
can happen often.
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promotes Inclusivity
  • Fosters Equality
  • Appreciate Diversity
  • Equitable Society
  • Broad Perspective
  • Problem-solving Skills
  • Real-World Diversity
  • Navigate
  • Global Society
  • Strive for Improvement
  • Unique Talents
  • Healthy Competitive Spirit
  • Reduce Social Inequality
  • Access to Resources
  • Empathy
  • Social Skills
  • Communication
  • Teamwork
  • Conflict Resolution
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