It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is necessary to make sure that students with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at
school
. I agree with this
statement. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Ensuring children
with a wide range of abilities mix with each other at school
can teach how
to be Correct pronoun usage
them how
wise
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a wise
person
. Fix the agreement mistake
people
Children
with good abilities are not allowed to be arrogant people especially at school
because they think have good capabilities. For example
, children
who have good ability in math should help their friends
who have difficulties in this
subject because Correct your spelling
nobody
no body
is perfect, and sometimes Correct your spelling
nobody
opposite
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the opposite
condition
can happen. They need help in other subjects from their Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
friends
. Not only in academic
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the academic
an academic
area
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areas
,
they Add the word(s)
but,
also
need help from other children
when they have Add an article
a problem
problem
, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
such
as when they get accident
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an accident
in
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on
road
outside the Add an article
the road
school
.
Ensuring children
from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school
is important to teach how give
respect to Add the particle
to give
other person
. Change the wording
another person
other people
This
is because children
from all social and economic background
must give Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
respect
Wrong verb form
respected
,
if Remove the comma
apply
children
want to be accepted by social
environment. Add an article
the social
For instance
, children
in school
will become friends
with all other children
without looking from good
economic or poor economic Add an article
the good
background
. Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
Consequently
, children
will have many friends
because they believe that children
are humble
Add an article
a humble
person
. If we have many Fix the agreement mistake
people
friends
, they can help when we face problem
in some areas when they meet us.
In conclusion, mixing with Fix the agreement mistake
problems
friends
at school
is very important. This
is because we can not live independently without other people. Sometimes we need help from other people and opposite
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the opposite
condition
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conditions
also
can happen often.Submitted by fasikhullisanugerah on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite