In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing. What are the reasons for this? How can this problem be solved?

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situated in some states
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to other countries they are travel usually sightseeing. If we look at statistics information
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interest. Modern visitors
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to walk historical places, famous monuments which it is
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towns.
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other lands, but
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generation and older
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art
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital era
  • online galleries
  • allure
  • economic factors
  • cultural pursuits
  • societal interests
  • innovative
  • engaging exhibitions
  • virtual reality (VR) experiences
  • accessible
  • contemporary
  • promote
  • art education
  • awareness
  • foster
  • appreciation
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