Housing and accommodation has become a major problem in many countries around the world. What are the main factors that have contributed to this problem? What can be done to help reduce the number of homeless people?

Housing and
accomodation
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accommodation
was
a
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major
problem
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problems
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around the world.Especially in
the
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poor countries. So I think it depends on
people
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the people
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and
government
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the government
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.If home prices are very high,
people
can't afford
it
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them
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.
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rich
people
.
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, I want to take my country.In my country every year more and more homeless
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I  see it every day.But we can see the celebrities who can help them.
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is a very good example for teenagers. Despite
this
, the problem with housing is being dismissed every day.Some
even
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in
emergency
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condition
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. They have survived
from
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the Soviet Union.And in many
cases
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old elderly
people
live there. Since I have already said it depends on the government.If expensive building materials will be expensive, too, high prices.It's not a lot of
people
in Corman.The cheapest prices for emergency houses.
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city
Almaty
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. There's money for everyone there.Because it is a megacity of Kazakhstan.All
people
work, the city is big and there are no problems with housing.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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