These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than by following a healthy lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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prefer to put responsibilities on the medicine and doctors' shoulders to take care of their health rather than revising their lifestyles. It is widely accepted that medicine plays an increasingly important role in maintaining public health and reliance on it is enough alone for
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purpose. I am convinced that
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wrong belief is widespread in our society and a healthy lifestyle, which can be a passport to living a healthy life, is being overlooked.
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, taking different
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is more acceptable these days and
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are taking more
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compared
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the past.
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increase can show that they are relying on medicine and are looking at
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as an easy way to reciprocate their unhealthy habits. By looking at the rate of supplement sales in well-known companies like Costco, it is clearly observed that
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prefer to obtain essential nutrients by taking supplements and continue having unhealthy diets.
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it,
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have the same approach regarding their illnesses.
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, diabetic patients are showing better medication compliance and prefer starting
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and counting sugar and carb intake
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of trying to balance their blood sugar by correcting eating and having regular physical exercise.
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,
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are visiting their physicians more frequently and looking for their guidance
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medical problems. A good example that demonstrates
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fact is the waiting time that one needs to wait to see their family physician in Canada. In most of these visits they are asking for a prescription to solve their problems and they are successful to leave the doctor's office with lists of various
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when it comes to changing their lifestyle, doctors usually face strict refusals and excuses. Apart from that, even in situations
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no useful medication exists,
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ask doctors do things for them rather than them taking action.
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, they easily accept undergoing surgeries for a
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knee rather than decreasing their weights and strengthening their muscles. To sum up, the fact that taking
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and depending on medical science is replacing eating a healthy diet, exercising, stopping smoking and limiting the intake of alcohol is completely accurate. I believe that their acceptance to take
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and the number of
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they use
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to the frequency of doctor visits can demonstrate it.
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