A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. -write a letter to the company. In your letter • Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sport team • Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts • Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to express my appreciation for your decision to spend
money
for the benefit of our community, either to sponsor a local children's sports team or to arrange two concerts. In my opinion,
the
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children are an important part of society and their mental
health
and their physical
health
are very important. Spending
money
in
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this
part
,
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can help
to
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future society.
Also
, if you assign the
money
for sponsoring a local children’s sports team, it would be very effective to improve community
health
.
on the other hand
, holding concerts not only can be a leisure activity that the people enjoy but
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the mental
health
of the community. Spending
money
on
this
activity would be very effective to increase social happiness. assign the
money
in both items are praiseworthy. But from my standpoint, spending
money
for the children means investment for the future. Because if we expend
money
for them, they can have possibilities to advance. So I prefer that the
money
that would be spent on the children’s sports team. Hoping that you will consider my suggestion. Yours faithfully, Mehdi Sohrabi
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