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QUESTION; In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Due to the modernisation of ,society a number of large shopping buildings have been constructed ;
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, the majority of
people
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 get attracted to these huge shopping centres. So, it is seen that multifarious local
shops
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 have closed due to financial loss as
people
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 nowadays like to buy
things
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 from
malls
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.
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 is a negative development because small
shops
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 are the only source of income for poor
people
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 and customers have to travel a lot to buy daily used products.
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 elaboration will be discussed in the following paragraphs along with suitable examples. To commence with, India is a nation where more than half of the population has been living below the poverty line.
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, many
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 of them are uneducated ;
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,
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 run a few businesses according to their financial status.
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this
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, these
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 run their small businesses in countryside areas, as a number of shopping
malls
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 are very less in the rural areas. So, these small
shops
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 are their only source of
money
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 their family is fully dependent on only these
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 ;
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, nowadays
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 try shopping in the large
malls
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 and so many shopping areas are available anywhere these days.
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, small
shops
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 honours have faced huge income losses and their
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 have closed. ,Now these
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 do not have enough
money
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 to full fill their basic requirements.
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, a report from Time Now in 2020 stated that almost
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 90% of
people
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 who face major losses in
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 trend were unable to buy meals for their families.
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, these trends have a huge negative impact on these small
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' honours. Moving
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, because small
shops
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 have closed ;
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,
people
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 have to travel a lot to buy even small
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 as milk, bread, sanitary napkins and many more from shopping centres and which is very time consuming and irritating as well.
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 , a lot of
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 have spent a huge amount of
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 in
malls
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 even if they do not have a need to buy any particular thing.
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, a survey from Oxford University stated that almost 70% of
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 buy
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 only to watch others or sometimes for product's attractive packaging they do not even need to purchase some products.
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,
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 spend there a huge collection of
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 only on unnecessary items. In conclusion, the closing of small
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 has a negative trend as many shopkeepers depended on them.
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,
people
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 have to travel very far to buy basic
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 and they spend a large amount to purchase unnecessary
things
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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