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Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, technologies have significantly contributed to every aspect and the
internet
 which is the precedent of advanced technologies has become significantly influential
to
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 one's daily life.
However
, since the
internet
 is now prevalently used, there are multiple harmful drawbacks that need to be considered or
otherwise
, it will become a serious disaster to human society. Decades ago,
people
 confronted their lives practically and now, with the invention of the
internet
, their lives have become convenient and available. Since they can accomplish most of their quests online, they will most likely underestimate their jobs as it is extremely flexible. Ultimately, it will contribute to their laziness and comfort zone.
Furthermore
, social media with
the
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access to the
internet
 are managed to be addictive to individuals which means that many
people
 are probably consuming their time on it by using social websites. For me,
such
 cases are highly detrimental and problematic since the overwhelming concept of the
internet
 is likely to reduce the ethics and morals of certain individuals.
For example
, on Facebook and TikTok,
people
 have become less moral by attempting to obtain influence through social media as it is effortless just to spread negative comments. Children are
also
 gradually addicted to video games which will potentially harm their eyesight. To sum up, considering the fact that the
internet
 has greatly assisted
people
 in every role, it is expected that
people
 will extensively use the
internet
 in their daily life.
However
, with proper arrangements, they can perfectly apply the
internet
 in a good way.
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