Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school .other , however , say that cooepration and team working skills are more important. Discuss bothe sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Nowadays, schools apply different methods of teaching and in some educational systems some skills excel others ,
that is
why some
people
believe that
children
should compete in
school
, while
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others
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other
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others
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think that schools
ought
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focus on
cooperation
and
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team
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teamwork
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work
skills .In my opinion,
students
who compete against each other in
school
are more successful , both in their lessons at
school
and
also
in their future life. On the one hand , many
people
believe that
students
who compete , do better at
school
.
In other words
, competition makes
students
more motivated
consequently
they gain good scores in their exams. It should be mentioned that when
students
compete , they usually try to show their best versions
therefore
they achieve resounding success.
In addition
, they learn how to compete with other
people
that
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which
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could be
great
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experience for their future, for living in
this
competitive world, especially when they want to find a job.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that
cooperation
is more important compared to
competition
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the competition
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.They believed that
cooperation
team
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teamwork
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work
in
school
prepare
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children
for better social life .To explain
this
issue , they say when
children
work
as a
team
,
first
of all , they learn how
interact
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with other
people
.Respecting and tolerating conflict ideas
moreover
is another result of
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teamwork
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team
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work
and
cooperation
.
Finally
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they learn how to negotiate to complete a task or convey their ideas and feelings as a
team
member . To conclude ,
people
may vary in their opinion but I think that
children
who learn to compete against each other have
better
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chance to succeed in
school
and later in life.
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