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只见 【题目要求】< 100 years ago, human race believed we would make continue proggress in allllareas of life. Today, some people fel less certain about this. what areas of progress human race has made? What else areas we haven't developed?

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As for which areas of humans have a keep on progressing,
people
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 always have arguments to discuss. I will list a range of reasons to explain what part is progressed for humans. And what part witnessed the reverse case To the most extent, technology has been improved drastically . Devices which have been produced like online shopping platforms rise each area of life for frown.
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, in the past, the frown had to waste time on the way to shop
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 of choosing appropriate items. It usually costs time and effort. In the light of the burgeon of service online,
people
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 exclusively stay at home and meet a need for an efficient and affordable shopping experience .
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 mainly represents how is the change in science on life quality. Unfortunately, ever since discrimination issue still is a headache for the world. As for gender, sexual minorities or races . There will be always conflicts and bring negative influences and produce endless problems. To be specific, if folk talk about sexual minorities, especially homosexuals, the impression of abnormal and aids will remind
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them. As it does in the case of the movie Philadelphia which reveals
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 stereotype. The hero Andrew was recruited because of the identity of gay
people
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 and aids patients. Friends even worried about being infected and all were away from him.
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, ways to transmit HIV mother-to-child transmission and blood are the main types of the way, which means normal social life cannot infect others. Unfortunately, most
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 leak
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 knowledge.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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