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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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According to some people
teenagers
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 should be working to gratis community
work
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 in their free time. One of the biggest reasons
of
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 that reason is
teenagers
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 are more productive than old people and
also
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 they are stronger than old individuals as
bodyly
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bodily
. But I don't think it's right that they don't take
money
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. Both of these viewpoints will be outlined in detail before reaching
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conclusion
conclusions
conclution
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. On the one hand,
teenagers
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 usually catch future trends which
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 being talked up about improved of
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technology
such
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 as metaverse because of
posibilty
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possibility
 of needed professions in the future.
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, if they boost by governments, they can be
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 and productive for
thier
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their
 countries.
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, they could
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information
 to others with unpaid about
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cultural
 problems.
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, many individuals do not know how can
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earthquake
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. they can teach
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easily
 to old humans.
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,
teenagers
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 who
work
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 free need
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money
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 to survive their life so they should earn some
money
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 what the consequences will be.
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employers
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the employers
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 may use them negatively.
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, when recent graduates start to
work
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thier
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their
 new job, the employers usually have
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made everything
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 they are not responsible. so their
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self confidence
self-confidence
 will be able to decrease day by day in many countries. To sum up,
teenagers
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 who
work
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 at an early age will effects positively to
community
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the community
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 and they will improve themselves but they should earn
money
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 for their
labor
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. they are both morale and try to do their best.
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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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