Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programme's (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree?

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The high school programme should include all
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of
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activities
which consisted of basic subjects, voluntary and social jobs in order to evolve
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fundamental qualifications of
children
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except preparing an educated citizen.
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,
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community
service
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is one of the most crucial
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issues
for
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humanity's
life. I believe that
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service
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can help to develop
children
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's qualities of compassion, kindness and friendship. So, I agree
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that unpaid community
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should be a compulsory part of high school
programme's
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.
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of all,
children
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can help
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younger kids and teach something
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as sports, cooking, dancing and singing to each other through that
service
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.
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, I consider that
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kind of
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can provide good
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opportunities
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children
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to spend their time effectively.
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the end, the people who have
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will help our planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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