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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The picture below shows the plant of museum in 1998 and after some changes was made in 2008. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

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This
 image illustrates the
museum
 in 1998 and its plan happened for 2008. It is clear from the graph that they use large spaces were not used and that changes just inside the
museum
. According to what is shown, after the entrance and exit place for tickets did not shift at all while the middle of the
museum
 has had a garden but, in 2008 fell with the garden, fountains, and cafe sitting area and the cafe upper that place.
Then
 on the right side have had some shops
then
 return the all right empty and the shops went to the opposite shift. While in 1998 the
museum
 has no restaurant until 2008 put one in the left corner.
Moreover
, temporary exhibition room. To sum up, we could say that the permanent exhibition room set is the same as in the past.
In addition
,
museum
 pictures in the
first
 period have huge unused spaces while in the
second
 age start to be more useful.
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