Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others,however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Disscuss both these views and give your opinion.

Few sections of society feel that guardians of the children should teach them how to become good citizens
however
, others believe that it's the accountability of the educational institutions. I will be discussing both views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, in today's busy world majority of the parents are working and get little time to spend with their relatives. So, it is believed that as
kids
are spending the majority of their time in school
then
they should be responsible not only for their academic results but
also
for building the moral character of the students.
For example
, many schools are charging high fees in the name of moral education and parents feel that if they are paying for it
then
tutors should teach it to the
kids
. I strongly disagree with
this
viewpoint. In my point of view, it is the responsibility of the elders to make their
kids
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good human beings. It is rightly said that the majority of the traits of the kid are gifted to him by his ancestors and home is the
first
school for the kid.
Moreover
, the family has a great influence on the young
kids
so, if the family members are good human beings
then
there is a greater probability that the kid will
also
be a sensible citizen.
For instance
, a pupil that follows good habits in his home will surely follow his educators.
However
, the opposite is not true as it might be possible that in the educational institute he is behaving well because of the pressure from educators. In the
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end I will conclude by saying that
although
, it is the responsibility of both the school and the elders to make the scholars responsible citizens, in my point of view family members should take
this
responsibility because in schools and colleges there are many students and mentors cannot dictate everything to every scholar. If parents take
this
role
then
our country will be a better place to live.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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