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Many people believe that film is a less important art than other forms such as literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by some that movies are a less prominent sort of
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 compared to other
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forms
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 like poetry and paintings.
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 essay will discuss to what extent I reckon
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 belief is incorrect and motion pictures are arguably as important as older types of
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, there are a few aspects of
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 belief that can be true. To commence with, when comparing
films
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 to
paintings
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paintings,
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 there are many features to be considered
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 popularity. In
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 forms of
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namely
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,
poetry
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poetry,
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are
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 significantly less well-known than movies. To illustrate, there are only a number of people who know Pablo
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Neruda,
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poet
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poet,
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 a famous actor like Leonardo DiCaprio is vastly
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 worldwide.
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, film production is a billion-dollar industry that strives to entertain people around the globe,
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 arts
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 as canvas and literature are only appealing to a relatively minor community.
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, historic depictions in the world are arguably not original
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 as technology has progressed over the years, sketches have been replaced
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 no one knows where the original ones actually are;
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 fact makes
films
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 more reliable.
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, other artistic phenomena
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 as poetry and paintings are more authentic and have the antiquity of centuries.
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, they often have a sentimental and fascinating story behind them. To cite an example, the majestic artwork called Mona Lisa created by Leonardo da Vinci was a depiction of the woman he loved
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 the significance of it is that not only does the facial impression in the painting alter depending on where someone stands, but that sort of innovation was centuries
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. In conclusion, despite the few merits of other kinds of
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such
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 as painting and literature
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, over
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films
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, I believe
films
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 are evidently as prominent as other artworks, if not even more.

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Development
Make each main idea clear and easy to follow. State a point, then give a simple reason.
Task Response
Show your position in the intro and keep it in all body parts. End with a clear verdict in the conclusion.
Coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'so' to help flow.
Examples
Choose examples that directly back your point and explain how they show your view.
Style
Avoid long, odd phrases. Use short, straight sentences to get your point across.
Task Response
The essay shows a clear view that films can be as important as other arts.
Examples
There are examples to support some ideas.
Structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • artistic expression
  • cultural significance
  • historical context
  • impactful
  • literary works
  • masterpiece
  • medium (e.g., medium of film)
  • narrative techniques
  • painting styles
  • pedagogical
  • perception
  • profound
  • technological advancement
  • visual storytelling
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