Nowadays, adults do little exercise. Some people believe that the best way to address this issue is by covering great sports events such as the Olympics on television. Others think that it is more beneficial to take other measures. What is your opinion?

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because the average
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health looks detroriateed
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of junk food which is very dangerous and unhealthy. To enhance general health there
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two main opinions ,
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Firstly
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television is the best way to achieve the purpose because they do think that when our television starts
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automatically we will follow them. It is not a clear idea and without logic to support it.
On the other hand
, other
people
believe there are many new ideas to
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adults to do exercises not only television .
For instance
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social media which become too popular and
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classes in schools. Eventually ,
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vert significant to
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ability of exercises and keep society fit.
Finally
, I strongly believe in using different methods to achieve goals.
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behaviour of doing exercises. many countries
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succeed
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projects. They build
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of playgrounds and encourage their
people
to practise. I do like the proverb saying ( the fit mind in the fit body).
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • high-profile
  • public awareness campaigns
  • gym memberships
  • workplace initiatives
  • government policies
  • tax incentives
  • local community events
  • physical activity
  • accessibility
  • motivation
  • successful athletes
  • broadcasting
  • inspire
  • subsidies
  • regular exercise
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