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Nowadays, adults do little exercise. Some people believe that the best way to address this issue is by covering great sports events such as the Olympics on television. Others think that it is more beneficial to take other measures. What is your opinion?

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Doing
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exercises
exercise
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 because the average
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health looks detroriateed
also
,
people
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alot
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 of junk food which is very dangerous and unhealthy. To enhance general health there
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 two main opinions ,
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Firstly
, some
people
 believe showing programs
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 television is the best way to achieve the purpose because they do think that when our television starts
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 automatically we will follow them. It is not a clear idea and without logic to support it.
On the other hand
 , other
people
 believe there are many new ideas to
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push
 adults to do exercises not only television .
For instance
, we could
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use
 social media which become too popular and
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useful
.
Moreover
, we can
also
 add more
sport
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 classes in schools. Eventually ,
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 vert significant to
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develop
people
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 ability of exercises and keep society fit.
Finally
 , I strongly believe in using different methods to achieve goals.
Such
 as enhancing the
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behaviour of doing exercises. many countries
sucssed
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succeed
 in
such
 projects. They build
alot
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a lot
 of playgrounds and encourage their
people
 to practise. I do like the proverb saying ( the fit mind in the fit body).
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