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Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

#people #books #importance #source #information #entertainment
It is commonly believed that
people
 can absorb information and
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 through various kinds of
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methods
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, which means that receive knowledge not limited
into
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books
.
However
, some
people
 disagree and
thus
 cause huge
controvesary
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controversy
. As far as I
concerned
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,
books
 still
remaint
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remain
remains
important
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 role as a source of
broading
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broadening
 knowledge. Nowadays, there are so many methods to receive information and entertainment with IT technology development.
For example
,
people
 can search and download
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an e-book
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e-book
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e-books
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 on the
amazon
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Amazon
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 website,
then
 send it with other e-
books
 into kindle at
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 time and bring it to read whatever
you
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 want. It is widely recognized that so many methods that get information and have fun with
more
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the more
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 convenient
method
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methods
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 and without payment.
However
,
books
 remained the same important role
as
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 the learning approach. Take the
text book
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textbook
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for instance
, though students prefer watching
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a video
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video
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videos
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 by phone, schools still send paper
books
 to their students each semester.
Moreover
,
scientist
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prefer
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 publish their articles
by
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in
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 paper
books
, which seems more formal. As above
aforemetioned
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aforementioned
, it is no doubt that
people
 can get
knowlege
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knowledge
 from different types of way currently and the status of
books
 actually declining in some aspect.
However
,
books
 still maintain
the
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 essential part of
broaden
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 knowledge and will
remian
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remain
 in the future.
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