Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
The art of
music
is universal. According to some people
it is a nice way to unite individuals of various cultures and ages together. Add a comma
,people
However
, I strongly believe music
has that kind of magical power which helps in eliminating age
differences and aids in developing a strong bond between people
of different communities and generations.
Music
has potential
to purify our Correct article usage
the potential
mind
and soul. It plays a very vital role in bringing Fix the agreement mistake
minds
people
from different countries together despite of
their caste, creed or race. Remove the preposition
apply
For instance
, whenever national
anthem of different countries Correct article usage
the national
are
played in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
world
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the world
olympic
games, each and every single person out their Change the capitalization
Olympic
stand
and Correct subject-verb agreement
stands
pay
respect to that song regardless of the fact to which country they belong. Correct subject-verb agreement
pays
Now a days
different reality shows are being telecasted , one Correct the word
Nowadays
such
platform is Americas got talent where contestants from various countries perform live music
and this
is one of the best examples of the fact how music
has been successfull
to unite different communities.
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successful
successfully
Similarly
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,Similarly
music
has capability
to Add an article
the capability
dimnish
Correct your spelling
diminish
generation
gap between Correct article usage
the generation
people
. For
instance
weddings, whenever Add a comma
,instance
music
is played, everyone follows the beat and enjoy
whether children, youngsters, adults or elderly Correct subject-verb agreement
enjoys
people
. However
, undoubtedly due to age
gap the ideas of different generations do not meet but Correct article usage
the age
music
gives immense pleasure to all and thus
helps to bonds
them together. To summarize when we listen to Wrong verb form
bond
music
age
does not matter, it brings happiness to all equally and somehow directly or indirectly plays a major part in bringing everyone together.
So, in conclusion
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,conclusion
music
cherishishes
all and Correct your spelling
cherishes
bring
contentment to everyone Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
inspite
of Correct your spelling
in spite
the
Correct article usage
apply
age
, different communities, religions
. It helps in developing a strong and everlasting bond among all Correct word choice
and religions
people
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite