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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Most people opine that
media
 often interferes in the private life of celebrities and it is evident from all the minute news that pop-ups on
media
 these days. Is there really a boundary to limit the invasion of social
media
 into famous personalities' lives? There are both positive and negative sides to
this
 scorching topic. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss both views and give my opinion. To start with, In recent times the film industry has drawn enormous attention from the general public and so are the actors involved in that. With the intervention of
media
 in celebrities' lives, every activity they do in their personal time is being bought to the light of the public.
For instance
, many actors are doing social services that when shown on television or on social websites can inspire their admirers to do similar activities which will not only impart good qualities to their followers but in turn benefit society. But
on the contrary
, when the actors are involved in illegal activities like taking drugs, teenagers
also
 tend to imitate them which is raising concern for their parents. Not only young children but adults are
also
 wasting their precious time by investing it in watching the news about these people which will not benefit them in their
real-life
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 in any way In conclusion, though there are few positives aspects which can benefit the general people by publishing the personal life of reel personalities I opine that there are more disadvantages which can affect the mindset of young children and lifestyle of adults too. Just because they choose a career which shows them on the screen shouldn’t give the authority to outsiders to interfere in their personal space.
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