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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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There have been many changes in the living style of the
people
 recently. Some believe that
this
 increase in
the
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living has been only beneficial to the urban
areas
 rather than the smaller
areas
 of the
nations
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.
Firstly
, these differences can lead to the feeling of jealousy
between
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 the folks living in the big cities and in the villages. The villagers have been thinking that they can never compete with the city
people
 which makes them stop thinking of anything productive and do something that can be a boon to their home town.
Secondly
, the
people
 living in the cities can afford all the expensive stuff for their kids as they have many good chances
for
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 doing jobs with good packages .When the children take them to the school so that they can show them to their other friends
then
a
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children who are from villages feel bad as there comes a question of affordability. Sometimes they are even teased by the rich students and
thus
 are being ignored. These kinds of situations can even increase the crime rates.
For example
, if someone cannot afford to buy a luxurious car they will steal or opt
any
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 wrong way so that can make themselves equal to their mates. Some measures must be taken to reduce these issues. The government should develop more and more job
oppourtunites
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opportunities
 in the rural
areas
.They should increase the tax rates so that
people
 can limit their spending so that a balance is maintained. Awareness must be made in the rural
areas
 about the new changes in the
livings
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. Overall, authorities must make sure that everything must be fair and must take
actions
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 if they see anything wrong.
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