In some countries, there are fewer young people who listen to or play classical music these days. Why is this? Should young people be encouraged to play or perform classical music?

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in the numbers who listen to classical
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in classical
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whether we should motivate anyone
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the
choice
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music
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on the movies and albums that are trending.
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artist come with new tunes, people of
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age starts to admire them and follow them by supporting their work.
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old
music
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classical.
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classical
music
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the mood with its melodious and calm
music
,
however
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prefrences
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preferences
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music
, we should not enforce anyone.
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, we can suggest or ask
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classical
music
but it should be their
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interest forcing them to something is
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amiss.
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- the schools can have some
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seasons
sessions
, where they can teach about various types of musical instruments, but the students should get a chance to select what they want to
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perform
or play. In conclusion, there are various factors which
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youth, which
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new
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music
era and movies. But with times,
music
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influence
anyone to make an alteration.
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