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In some countries, there are fewer young people who listen to or play classical music these days. Why is this? Should young people be encouraged to play or perform classical music?

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the nations,
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children's
childrens
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choice
 of
music
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decrease
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a decrease
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 in the numbers who listen to classical
music
. There are many
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factors
 which change their taste in
music
, alternatively, new
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generation
 have their own hip hop
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 which they are particularly fond
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.
This
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popularity
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 in classical
music
in
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 new
pople
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people
, and
further
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 whether we should motivate anyone
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the
choice
 of
music
.
Firstly
, one possible cause of
this
 transformation from classical
music
 to new
genration
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generation
generations
music
 is the
millenial
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millennial
 and
genration
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generation
 Z have entirely
diffrent
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different
 choices in everything, and it is
same
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the same
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 when it comes to
music
.
Furthermore
, the
choice
 of
music
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also
depend
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 on the movies and albums that are trending.
In other words
, as
new
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 artist come with new tunes, people of
new
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 age starts to admire them and follow them by supporting their work.
This
 leads to leaving the passion
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 old
music
that is
 classical.
Although
,
the
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classical
music
enlighten
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 the mood with its melodious and calm
music
,
however
 when it comes to
someones
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prefrences
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preferences
of
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music
, we should not enforce anyone.
Moreover
, we can suggest or ask
youngstars
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youngsters
 to try
for
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classical
music
 but it should be their
choice
 and without
individuals
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,individuals
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 interest forcing them to something is
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amiss.
For example
- the schools can have some
seasions
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seasons
sessions
, where they can teach about various types of musical instruments, but the students should get a chance to select what they want to
perfrom
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perform
 or play. In conclusion, there are various factors which
influance
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influence
 youth, which
are
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new
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the new
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music
 era and movies. But with times,
music
 changes and we should not
influnce
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influence
 anyone to make an alteration.
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