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The bestway to reduce youth crime is to educate parents about good parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#bestway #youth #crime #parents #skills
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human
rights
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has
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 always been a topic of
debates
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, and, taking into account everything which is currently happening in the world, will not
loose
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the
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public attention even in
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 distant future. In general, human
rights
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 are things a person, regardless of
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 gender, age, ethnicity and other factors, is allowed to do.
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, if human
rights
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 are respected,
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 peaceful world and
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development can be guaranteed.
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, even fundamental human
rights
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 are often violated. Having experienced it myself several times, I still believe in
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 community where each member’s
rights
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 are taken into consideration.
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 world with no
discriminaton
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discrimination
 and violation can be considered
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uthopian
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utopian
, I am convinced that if concerned people, including me, will put enough
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, utopia today will become the reality tomorrow.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting education
  • behavioural strategies
  • family relationships
  • communication
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • peer pressure
  • societal issues
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • comprehensive community programs
  • law enforcement
  • legal consequences
  • deter
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