Smacking children is best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are many changes in
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parenting styles these days. Few believe that hitting
kids
or screaming at them is
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suitable way to maintain discipline among students. I think
this
can be helpful as well as can have
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detrimental
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effect on the children.
Firstly
, being strict can generate the feeling among the toddlers that they are not being loved.They will always be
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depressed
dressed
and
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suppressed
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will end up struggling with themselves without having anyone nearby with whom they can share their emotions.Their behaviour will be more arrogant and rude.they will
also
be
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deprived
derived
from sharing their thoughts , questions and concerns with their parents.
For example
; if a kid is being bullied in the school by his mates he would not be that
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courageous
to share
this
concern with his parents due to the fear that they will not listen to his situation but
instead
will be blamed for whatever he is facing.
Secondly
, sometimes children end up committing suicide when they find lots and lots of negativity around but no one to discuss their problems.
Moreover
,
kids
will always know if they
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wrong they will have to undergo severe consequences.They will always
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and
mannered
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knowing the fact that they are being watched.
In addition
to
this
, teenagers will always be
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their limits.For an instance,
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school going
kids
from 12 to 20 years of age can get into
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bad company and sometimes even start taking drugs
hence
ruining their future.But the fear of the family can stop them from doing
this
. Overall , "Excess of everything is bad".Too much ruling on the
kids
can have an impact on them which can always stay in their
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and most likely,
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separate
them from the outside world
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excess of liberty can make them fearless and they will do whatever they like and
thus
end up destroying their future.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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