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Some people believe that building cities vertically, with tall towers, is better than building cities horizontally. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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I believe that there is a group of people who would prefer the upward
expansion
 of the
city
. In my viewpoint, I agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay shall discuss both sides of the argument. On the one hand,
upward
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expansion
 of a
city
 can help the developers use less precious land, while it
also
 can protect the natural environment. I believe that planners have no reasons to destroy wildlife habitats that help preserve the ecosystems and
its
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 natural resources.
This
 can provide enough space
to
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 where public parks could be constructed and used. Which can help meet people’s demand for fresh air and outdoor physical activity.
For instance
, in my country of Vietnam, Ho Chi Minh
City
’s council members have developed Thủ Thiêm
city
 with has many tall buildings and public parks that ensure a clean and
a
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clear environment
of
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 all living things.
On the other hand
, the outward
expansion
 of cities can create a
city-sprawl
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, which may even cause more concern.
Such
 as, transportation has become more and more challenging and congested. During peak times there are now more vehicles on the roads, which causes traffic jams and pollution.
This
 can
also
 result in
a
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hazardous air quality, which advises the citizens that they should not even go out. All in all, the
city
 planners must consider these two key factors, preservation of the ecosystem and traffic jams to avoid an outward
expansion
. Developers should balance these benefits among
its
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 stakeholders in society before making any
city
expansion
 decisions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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