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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific, research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the complex world of academics nowadays, there are a lot of individuals who believe that it is good to share more and more
information
 about science, research, business and the academic world.
However
, there are several
people
 who think that sources are much more important and too valuable to be shared freely. Both ideas have advantages and disadvantages.
However
, when it comes to the point when I have to show my preference, I would prefer to choose to share
information
 with the world. In the case of sharing
information
 freely, the
first
 benefit is that sharing
information
 allows ordinary
people
 to access the data and tends to get
people
 much more successful .
In other words
, apart from researchers, normal
people
 tend to have more opportunities in learning in academic terms.
For instance
, the Korean reports present the proportion of successful
people
 who can access special data increased significantly from 2% in 2009 to approximately 12% in 2022.
Moreover
, sharing valuable knowledge can develop countries which
mean
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 when sources can be accessed anywhere,
people
 tend to have more knowledge.
That is
 to say, citizens will develop their counties with their brains.
For example
, Google company give a lot of secret input to their employees and the result is their employees become more creative and productive.
Nevertheless
, there are a few disadvantages . The
first
 one is
people
 might become non-active because it is easier to search for
information
 on google. Another one is, that employees tend to lack production which means they would not try to understand complex situations. As sources are too important to be shared freely, the
first
 positive aspect is that the info would be much more valuable which means the requirements of
people
 who can access
this
 data are being harder and harder but it is clear to confirm that they get good researchers. Anyhow , there are a lot of obvious negative aspects.
First
 of all,
information
 can disappear.
Secondly
, the development of countries might be slow. All in all,after careful consideration, I still hold on to my position that
people
 should share
information
 with others because sharing
people
's knowledge is much more valuable than keeping it to yourself.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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