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Writing Samples
Band 6

You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request confirmation that this is agreed Begin your letter 'Dear' Do not write any addresses

#product #store #work #manager #action #request #confirmation #addresses
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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
 letter to your recording insurance which I bought a new
phone
 in your store. Which is located in Tashkent. The number is WAC 02711 service 2023.Let me explain to you the condition of the
phone
. Earlier the
phone
 looked perfect in condition
moreover
, it was working smoothly until
then
. The screen is getting close automatically
while
 my work on the
phone
 is going on. I am very disappointed with the kind of product it emerged .
While
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Task Achievement
Make sure to fully respond to all parts of the task. Your letter did not clearly propose an action for the store to take or request confirmation that this is agreed. Including these elements will improve your task achievement score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a clear and logical structure in your writing. Organize your ideas into paragraphs, each focusing on a single point. This will make your writing more coherent and easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Use a suitable writing tone throughout your letter. While your opening was appropriately formal, make sure the entire content matches the formality of the situation.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a closing statement in your letter. This will ensure a well-rounded conclusion and enhance the logical structure of your response.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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