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You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: – Provide details about the event – Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel – Suggest areas for improvement.

Dear Sir/Madam, With due respect My name is Gagan and I work at Shining Advertising Company. We just visited your hotel for our birthday party,
last
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 week. The purpose of writing
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 letter is to highlight the
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 liked by my team members
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 focusing on
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 of improvement.
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 with, the event was organised on 25th March in the banquet hall of
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 4-star hotel in the evening. The party was joined by almost 400 people
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 our company of diverse backgrounds to celebrate our owner's 50th birthday, which was quite a special day. To highlight the
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 liked by my team members, first and foremost one was the service of your staff as it was frequent
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 welcoming.
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, their presence seemed like team members as they made us feel comfortable too by accompanying us during the celebration. On the downside, some
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 still need some improvement
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 as the
food
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 quality. We chose
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 location by looking at the 4-star rating on your website,
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, the
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 received during the party was not that fresh which is the utmost important thing.
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, it could be improved by hiring professional chefs and providing freshly cooked
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. I hope to enjoy our next visit with high-quality
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. Yours sincerely, Gagandeep Kaur

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coherence cohesion
Ensure a more structured approach by clearly dividing sections for event details, positives, and suggestions.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or details about the event to enhance the response.
suitable writing tone
The warm and respectful tone throughout the letter contributes positively to the writing style.
complete response
The details about the event, such as the date and purpose, are well presented, giving a clear context to the letter.
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