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In some countries, a foreign language is taught at primary schools. Do the advantages of learning a new language outweigh the disadvantages?

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In a few countries,
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 are taught
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non-native
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 at their entry-level education. There are a vast number of merits to
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 trend which overweigh the demerits. In
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 debating topic to support my opinion. To commence with, the benefits of learning other foreign
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 by
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 in schools will provide them with a wider range of job opportunities.
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, English is a global
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 and almost all multi-national companies look for candidates who are good at the
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, when the
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 grow up and move to other states, it would be easy for them to overcome
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 barriers.
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, when
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 are introduced to other non–native
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 at a very young
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 they might develop a new interest in the
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. On the other side,
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 kids who are not capable of learning many new things at a time might end up getting confused and may lose interest in their studies in the long run which will affect their education in a bad way. Some people may not find it useful to learn the other medium of communication at
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 and they believe that their pupils are just being snowed up with lots of burdens which is not necessary at that
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. To conclude, I opine that there are more positive aspects in teaching the kids at a young
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other
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, as it helps them in finding a good job and helps their interaction with others easy when they move abroad. There are a few negative aspects too like
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 getting confused and ending up losing interest in studies and can be ignored because when
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 are taught properly, they will not face the issues.
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