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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at increasing sale. Others think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #sale #attention
These days,
publicity
 is deeply established in our daily life. On the one hand, many
people
 claim that advertising highly increments vending.
On the other hand
, other portions of
people
 agree that ads are extremely quotidian and normally ignored. In my opinion, I agree that
publicity
 generally is irrelevant but well drove marketing
campaigns
 are greatly successful in accomplishing sales. Specifically,
this
 essay will discuss the
non
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remarcable
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remarkable
publicity
 problem and the catchy marketing movements. When it comes to advertising, a wide portion of the market makes a traditional view of
publicity
. In
orther
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other
order
 to give extra visibility to their products, mainly
well known
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well-known
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 companies
develops
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 marketing
campaigns
 that describe partially their products or
giving
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 already
know
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 information
for
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 the spectator. Due to it, these ads are ignored and
results
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result
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 in a not worth it economic expend.
For example
,
perfumes
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perfume
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 advertisements are played by models and famous
people
 in an imaginary world repeating the same path, making
people
to
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apply
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ignore them.
However
, there are marketing
campaigns
 that are flashy and interesting for the spectator. When it comes to showing
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an ad
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ad
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ads
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 in a reimagined way, big companies have mastered the key points to retain their viewers.
Additionally
, these revolutionary
publicity
 movements are a massive success, making impressive revenues.
Such
 as Nike's advertisements, showing para Olympics
athlets
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athletes
 on their day-to-day working schedule. These ads doubled the total
incomes
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income
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 for that year's quarter in Nike. To conclude, traditional advertising is ignored simply because they are not catchy and are practically predicted by
people
.
By contrast
, there are marketing
campaigns
 that take advantage of flashy and showy topics for
people
, resulting in a complete accomplishment. In my point of view, advertising is a great way to increase sales if you know the correct way to
develope
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develop
 them.
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