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Write an essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view. A lot of young people take a gap year before they start university. Do you think this is a good or a bad thing?

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gap
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year
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 is typically a
year
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-long break before or after university during which students engage in various educational and development activities. A lot of young
people
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 take it, but is it the right decision? I believe that taking time off before starting university has a beneficial influence on students.
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year
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 makes it possible to travel around the world.
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, youngsters can try different cuisine, see different landmarks and exchange historical and cultural values.
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, teenagers will be more open-minded and more cosmopolitan.
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, during the
gap
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year
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 young
people
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 can not only work somewhere they want, but
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 they can prepare for the applying to the university.
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, gaining work experience is extremely important for developing a person`s personality. By doing
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,
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 learn about the hardships of life as soon as possible.
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, it is a fact that more and more students decide to quit learning because they are tired of school routines and even are stressed. They want to change their lifestyle and surroundings. It is better to spend time on things they like and make them feel good. All in all, it is a good idea to take a
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year
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. I strongly believe that a
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year
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 is the best choice for young
people
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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