Task 1; The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The given bar charts illustrate what
UK
Use synonyms
gradates
and alumna did after leaving
Correct your spelling
graduates
college
in 2008.
Change the capitalization
College
Overall
, Linking Words
a
number of Correct article usage
the
Add an article
a destination
destination
of the Fix the agreement mistake
destinations
UK
recipient have higher than Use synonyms
Add an article
the destination
a destination
destination
of the Fix the agreement mistake
destinations
UK
alumna . Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
further
review has the number of people Linking Words
are
the highest both in recipient and alum in the Change the verb form
is
UK
. Interestingly , Use synonyms
the
voluntary Correct article usage
apply
work
has the number of people Use synonyms
are
the lowest both graduates and postgraduates in the Change the verb form
is
UK
.
Focusing on the first graph,Use synonyms
it
shows that Correct pronoun usage
apply
29,665
graduate Correct article usage
the 29,665
students
increase to Use synonyms
peak
in Add an article
a peak
further
study. In contact,the figures Linking Words
in
voluntary Change preposition
for
work
Use synonyms
was
only 3500 graduate Change the verb form
were
students
. Use synonyms
In addition
, part-time Linking Words
work
was higher than unemployment by 1500 graduate Use synonyms
students
.
Turning to the Use synonyms
second
graph, it shows that Linking Words
further
study was the highest at 2725 postgraduate Linking Words
students
and Use synonyms
further
study was higher than part-time Linking Words
work
at 190 postgraduate Use synonyms
students
which 1625 did Use synonyms
unemployment
. Replace the word
unemployed
On the other hand
, the voluntary Linking Words
work
Use synonyms
was
only 345 Unnecessary verb
apply
of
postgraduate Change preposition
apply
students
.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, work, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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