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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns ad cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today, with the increased number of online shopping these become a threat to many markets and shops,
this
 essay will explore positive and negative views and express my view in the end. On the one hand, we can see tend for
people
 to buy through online shopping there are many reasons for
this
 matter one of these is related to price because usually, the price is very lower than the outside market,
in addition
, sometimes the price is inclusive of discounts,
furthermore
,
people
 can buy very easy and they do not waste their time, another aspect is they can compare many items and
then
 they buy it,
for example
, the
amazon
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Amazon
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 is a very good sample for online shopping and
people
 can see a lot of product and they can compare it and they can receive it very easily.
On the other hand
, there are many
people
 that are interested in buying the form of traditional,
although
, the online shopping is very easy to buy some the
people
 do not have any trust in the online market, some of them like to go out and buy from the street market and someone else can not use of the computer,
for instance
, elderly
people
 can not work with computer and other media to easily and they have to buy to outside. in conclusion, we check both sides and
this
 essay mentioned that a lot of benefits of online shopping and adverse idea, In my opinion, the technology leat to we do not waste
us
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our
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 time and more
people
 who do not use
this
 system due to lack of training.
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