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Some people believe that you should be fined if you do not recycle. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,
people
 are facing severe environmental issues occurring continually all over the world like climate change, air pollution,
natural
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 disasters,...Recycling
waste
 is thought about as a good way to improve these environmental conditions. Some
people
 suggest that
people
 should be penalized if they do not recycle. In
this
 essay, I will give some points against
this
 statement. It is evident that the main reason for these current environmental problems is the huge consumption of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 as a major energy source.
This
 means that
people
 need to reduce dependence on
this
 non-renewable source to resolve the alarming green matters.
Besides
, recycling
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contributes partly to improving the green condition.
Therefore
, the obligation to recycle can not solve completely the environmental issues happening.
On the other hand
, another reason against recycling punishment is that most countries have not imposed any rules and regulations related to recycling materials.
Besides
, the majority of governments have not prepared any concrete recycling plan yet. Plenty of recycling activities
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 been carried out voluntarily.
Consequently
, it will be unacceptable to fine
people
 who do not recycle
while
 governments have not been willing to work on it. Apart from the reluctance of governments, the knowledge of recycling in the population is still low.
People
 do not know how to recycle household
waste
. Remarkably, they are not familiar with recycling household
waste
.
Thus
, it is unreasonable to be fined if
people
do
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 not aware of the importance of recycling.
To sum up
, recycling
waste
 is
also
 a vital solution for green issues. As these points
mentioned
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 in
this
 essay, the government should encourage the public to recycle household
waste
 voluntarily before imposing compulsory recycling policies.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly relates to the main topic and presents well-developed ideas, both in support and against the argument. Make sure the introduction introduces the topic clearly, and the conclusion summarizes the main points effectively.
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Address all parts of the task, providing a clear opinion and supporting it with relevant arguments. Give specific examples or details to support your ideas and make sure the ideas are logically organized.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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