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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is rightly said that with the growing advancements in the
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care
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 sector, more and more people are living longer. But the question is whether our society is well-prepared to cater to the needs of the elderly. Let us discuss
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, with the rise in the number of seniors, there will be an increase in the number of elderly suffering from
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 problems as well.
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 leads to the rise in demand for specialists in these medical fields, supporting medical equipment, some of which are priced heavily. There will be a shortage of nurses, seniors, caregivers and medications for illnesses commonly affecting the elderly. To answer the question of whether our society is equipped to cope with
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 an increase in numbers, I would say that we are not fully prepared. The reason is we are all well aware of ways in which the old age people can be best-taken
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 of and we have sufficient medical advancements to take cope
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 their
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. Society is prepared only up to a certain extent because these
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 facilities do not reach every individual in the world. It is only the privilege of the wealthy. There are still thousands of people in the world who are not aware of many
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 advancements and many more who cannot afford to treat their dear ones. To conclude, the increase in the number of elderly can only be managed by making sure that affordable healthcare reaches everyone.
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